Hi Tallpoppy,
Your cam actually looks pretty good. It does appear that it wasn't finished ripening though, as the middle paste still looks "chalky". The mould ripens from the outside in, and the goal is to get things to ripen to the centre without turning into the swimming pool examples above!
Your mould coverage looks really nice, and the rind on yours doesn't look too thick, so I think you're well on your way. Continue with your make protocol, and make very detailed notes about what you did. Also, describe to yourself what the curds are doing, in a way that you will remember what was going on during the next make, so you can compare how things went. I think you'll be onto some excellent results very soon by the looks of things. Well done.
- Jeff